иԇһyP(gun)@Hڃ(ni)ݘ(gu)˼y߀wF(xin)ڱڌпǷһЩZʽϵСe`(do)ƪ©ٳ挢Y(ji)ʮиec(din)ɡ
1һ(Disagreements)
^һ²ָ^һ߀˔(sh)IJһrB(ti)һ¼~һµ
1. When one have moneyhe can do what he want to.
(һXʲôʲô) onedžΔ(sh)˷Qhave(yng)Ğhas; ͬwant(yng)Ğwantsǵ͵^һ
Ğ飺Once one has moneyhe can do what he wants (to do).
2 Zeλ(Misplaced Modifiers)
ӢZchZͬͬһZھӲͬλӵĺx׃@һc(din)ЇW(xu)]ҕ Ҫ`1. I believe I can do it well and I will better know the world outside the campus.
betterλò(dng)(yng)ھĩ
3 Ӳ(Sentence Fragments)
ڿZHpɽքZĵȣľȫԱǕZͲͬˣӽY(ji)(gu)˼_(d)@Nrl(f)䌑ԺPЩa(b)frl(f)
1. There are many ways to know the society. For example by TVradionewspaper and so on.
벿“for example by TV, radio, newspaper and so on”һľHһЩB؞~Zܪ(d)ɾ
Ğ飺There are many ways to know societyfor exampleby TVradioand newspaper.
4 ҴZ(Dangling Modifiers)
^ҴZָĶZcӵ߉P(gun)ϵy磺At the age of tenmy grandfather died. @“at the age of ten” ֻc(din)ʮqr]f“ l”ʮqrһmy grandfather ҂@ҴZ_һc(din)ȫͲôM(fi)
Ğ飺When I was tenmy grandfather died.
1. To do well in collegegood grades are essential.
вʽZ “to do well in college” ߉Z
Ğ飺To do well in college a student needs good grades
5~`(Misuse of Parts of Speech)
“~`”F(xin)飺~(dng)~;~(dng)~;~(dng)~õ
1. None can negative the importance of money.
negative ϵ~`~
Ğ飺None can deny the importance of money.
6ָ(Ambiguous Reference of Pronouns)
ָҪvǴ~cָ˻P(gun)ϵȺõĴ~һԇ@һ䣺
Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted her to be her bridesmaid.
(ҽҪҪİ)x@һԒxߟo_ДλlY(ji)l(dng)҂`Ĵ~ָ_˼һĿȻˡ@ӿɸĞ飺
Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted my sister to be her bridesmaid.
1. And we can also know the society by serving it yourself.
˷Q~we ͷ~yourselfָһ
Ğ飺We can also know society by serving it ourselves.
7g(Run-on Sentences)
ʲôrun-on sentence?Ո䡣
1. There are many ways we get to know the outside world.
@Ӱ˃Ɍ˼“There are many ways.” Լ“We get to know the outside world.”εذBһͲ(dng)
Ğ飺There are many ways for us to learn about the outside world.
There are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world.
8~ë(Troubles in Diction)
Diction ָضľm(dng)?sh)x~ZĆ}ڽ̌W(xu)rgo̎ƽr@滨ĕrgOӰˌW(xu)ڌЛ]B(yng)õõ (x)TSÁ~(dng)?sh)e`ȱȽ
1. The increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution
(r(nng)I(y)滯W(xu)|(zh)ʹõIJҲȾ)@Ȼobstacles“ϵK”“ϵK”`substance“|(zh)”“the increasing use (ӵʹ)” (yng)Ğ“abusive use (E)”
Ğ飺The abusive use of chemical substances in agriculture also causes/leads to pollution.
9٘(Redundancy)
ԺFӛ]һ~;]һoҪľÆ~IJ~M;~MIJÏľ磺
In spite of the fact that he is lazyI like him.
“the fact that he is lazy”ϵͬ^Zľ䣬҂“~MIJÏľ”
ԸĞ飺In spite of his lazinessI like him
1. For the people who are diligent and kind money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need.
ӿԴ
Ğ飺Diligentcaring people use money only to buy what they need.
10 B؞(Incoherence)
B؞ָһǰԲZǽY(ji)(gu)ϲͨ@Ҳǿë
1. The fresh waterit is the most important things of the earth.
The fresh water c̖it B؞It cthings ڔ(sh)治һ
Ğ飺Fresh water is the most important thing in the world